Magical Bubbles

02 Oct

Bluebell books short story slam week 11 prompt 

To view more short stories and poetry on this weeks prompt visit: Bluebell Books  

I was beginning to regret staying behind to help clear up after the party in the village hall.  It had been a good night with everyone dancing and having fun. I had volunteered to stay behind and help with clearing up the tables.  My friends were waiting for me and it was plain to see that they wanted to get back to the holiday cabin and relax before bedtime.   ‘Why don’t you just head over to the cabin,’ I said, ‘I wont be long and it’s not too far away.’   My friends looked at me and Janice who was the youngest of our group said, ‘Are you sure you will be ok getting back to the cabin?’  ‘It’s dark outside and there are no lights.’    ‘I am a big girl now Janice, I will be fine, off you go and put the kettle on I wont be much longer now.’  I smiled at my friends and they reluctantly went on their way back to the holiday cabin.

An hour had gone by since my friends had left for the holiday cabin. I had finished helping to clear the tables and I had my coat on ready to leave.  I said goodnight to everyone.  Someone called to me as I reached the door, ‘Will you be ok out there Jeanie?’  ‘Yes don’t worry I will be fine, I know this place well now and it’s not too far, ‘ I replied waving goodbye as I opened the door to head out into the darkness.

I began my walk into the darkness away from the lights of the village hall. I could barely see the road and I reached into my pocket and brought out my trusty little torch.  There was just enough light to let me see where the road was.   It was very dark there was no moon in the sky to guide me and as I continued my walk I was confident that I knew where I was and I knew how to get back to the cabin.

I had been walking for sometime and I stopped, there was not a sound to be heard. As I looked around I realised that I did not recognise where I was.  I started to panic. I waved my little torch around to try and see what was around me.  The road had turned into a pathway and I did not recognise it.   To make matters worse the light from my torch was fading.  Should I keep walking on this path or should I try and make my way back to the road?  I decided to follow the path and began walking.

Eventually the light from my little torch was no longer there. The battery had died.  Now I was in total darkness, alone and lost and a little scared.   ‘There must be cabins around here somewhere,’ I thought, ‘it’s only a small cabin site’.  I continued to slowly make my way along what I hoped was the pathway. Suddenly something brushed against my cheek, it was very soft and I automatically put my hand up to my face. My cheek was wet. ‘That’s all I need I thought, rain.’

I decided to try my torch once more as I had heard somewhere that if you rest the battery it can sometimes gain enough strength to work again for a few minutes.  I switched it on and to my surprise it was bright. I waved it around to try and see where I was. Something brushed my cheek again and I shone the torch upwards to see the rain.  There was no rain, all I saw was lots of bubbles floating around in the air above me.  It was unbelievable, where did they come from way out here? I was puzzled and couldn’t take my eyes off them.

As I watched, the bubbles formed the shape of an arrow pointing forward. My instincts told me to walk in that direction.  I began walking and the bubbles were now at the front of me and I was careful to keep the torch on them.   The brightness of my torch did not change as I followed the bubbles along the pathway in the direction they were pointing to.  This was amazing and it all felt so surreal.

After a while I saw the lights of the cabin ahead of me and I stopped. The bubbles were now floating all around me, on my head, my nose, they were everywhere. I put my hand out to try and catch one but they avoided capture.  I stood for a few minutes enjoying the magic of the moment.  I started to walk to the cabin and the bubbles went with me, they tickled my face and nose, it was as though they were happy. I was happy too, they had helped me to find our cabin.   When I reached the cabin door the bubbles drifted back away from me. I turned the handle of the door to go inside then I looked back.  The bubbles had started floating away into the darkness. I watched until they had disappeared.

I went into the cabin and Janice came from the kitchen with a nice cup of tea.  ‘You weren’t that long after all,’ she said.  ‘Oh, I asked, how long have I been gone?’  Janice looked at me and said, ‘Only just over an hour.’  I couldn’t believe it, I felt as though it had taken me hours to get here.   I decided not to tell my friends about my magical bubbles showing me the way.  They would not have believed my magical story.  I know it happened and I will never forget the magical moment I spent with the mysterious bubbles.

Each time I go on holiday to the cabin, I often walk along the path where I saw the bubbles to see if they will appear again.  At the side of the path there is a small river that runs adjacent to it. I could have quite easily have fallen down the embankment and into the river. I believe that the bubbles came along to prevent me from falling in.  I have never seen the bubbles again, but maybe one day if I ever really need them they will return.

Jeanie McBain for Bluebell Books story slam week 11


Posted by on October 2, 2011 in Short Stories


34 responses to “Magical Bubbles

  1. charlesmashburn

    October 2, 2011 at 12:33 pm

    What a delightful story! I wonder if there were angels in those bubbles? Very well done!


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 12:47 pm

      Hello Charles, thank you for your comment that is much appreciated 🙂


  2. cj Schlottmanl

    October 2, 2011 at 2:16 pm

    This story is truly magical. Your style is very fluid, and you carried me along beside you on your trip through the woods. Well done!



    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 2:50 pm

      Thank you for your comment and visit cj it is truly appreciated :


  3. Jamie

    October 2, 2011 at 2:24 pm

    That’s a very sweet story. I enjoyed the fact that you did not explain the origin of the bubbles, a little mystery is always good! Well written.

    And thanks for visiting my story earlier.


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 2:51 pm

      Thank you Jamie for your visit and comment. Both are greatly appreciated


  4. vivinfrance

    October 2, 2011 at 2:31 pm

    You kept the tension up very well, and the relief at the end was palpable.


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 2:51 pm

      Thank you viv I am glad you enjoyed the story 🙂


  5. Ina

    October 2, 2011 at 3:44 pm

    A good story, well written to the end, I enjoyed very much! 🙂


  6. Elizabeth

    October 2, 2011 at 6:33 pm

    Jeanie, this story made me feel absolutely giggly and brought excited, happy tears to my eyes. You did a great job building suspense and then rolling out that magical happy ending! I adore this story, and I hope you don’t mind, but I’m going to share this on my FB page. Terrific story!



    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 6:44 pm

      Thank you so much Elizabeth and I don’t mind at all if you share the story with your Facebook friends thank you xx


  7. Elizabeth

    October 2, 2011 at 6:35 pm

    I also love the title of your blog: All Kinds of Everything!


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 6:45 pm

      Thanks Elizabeth, I wasn’t sure what to call the blog and I write all kinds of everything so …. 🙂


  8. manicddaily

    October 2, 2011 at 7:04 pm

    A very sweet change from rain to bubbles.


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 2, 2011 at 7:10 pm

      Thank you manicdaily and thank you for visiting it is much appreciated xx


  9. thingy

    October 2, 2011 at 8:38 pm

    Oh, I love a happy ending. Great story, from start to lovely finish. : )


  10. Write Girl

    October 2, 2011 at 9:00 pm

    I enjoyed the magical story of the bubbles. A very nice read. P.S. I’ll check you out on twitter. I just created an account 🙂


  11. Inside the Mind of Isadora

    October 3, 2011 at 5:25 am

    A spiritual thought to have bubbles guide you home. A very enjoyable story. And, perhaps, a savior from the dangerous waters along that path.


  12. danroberson

    October 3, 2011 at 5:11 pm

    Bubbles or angels came to your aid,
    Showing the way lest your light fade,
    They led you right to your door,
    And will be your guides forevermore.

    Excellent story.


  13. The Noiseless Cuckooclock

    October 4, 2011 at 3:15 pm

    magical and witty.



  14. Helena (Hey! Lena)

    October 4, 2011 at 11:10 pm

    Sweet, sweet, sweet! I’m forever getting lost on visits to my family in London. I think I’ve learned the routes properly when I haven’t. I took their dog a walk once and was away 4 hours. The dog was knackered! Those elusive little bubs would have come in handy then!……lol


    • Jeanie McBain

      October 5, 2011 at 6:43 am

      Hello Helena, thank you for your comment. lol I have no sense of direction so maybe the magical bubbles are wishful thinking 🙂


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  16. Life: Between the lines

    October 13, 2011 at 4:29 pm

    awwww, it was pretty a journey through your write! 🙂 happy rally!



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